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L. Rowan Hart's avatar

I think André is at his best when his narration leans into that wry, observant and slightly detached voice. It feels conversational and alive.

“If you got points for shouting Sam would have won.”

“Professional fouls are like that. Accidentally on purpose or just bad timing?”

“In the olden days, I would have slapped him in the face with my glove…”

Anthony Fantasy's avatar

🙏 Cut out as much as possible to get to the bones.

L. Rowan Hart's avatar

Amplifies his likable personality :)

meg's avatar

There were so many good quips in this, especially directed at Sam. Great way to end the chapter too, full stop in the midst of tension.

Anthony Fantasy's avatar

Sam, the Englishman. The Englishmen reappear in chapter 3, in Ancient Britain ;) It's a finished novel, but I have only posted 3 Chapters.